Laurinda Mcgibboney
Tuesday, August 16, 2011
Howz this for a prologue??.........?
the story is great! you really captured the emotion of being hurt. BUT it feels like something is missing. Maybe more coldness or sensitivity from him. And some sentences should be reshaped. But you are on a great track!
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